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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by Gog the Mild via FACBot (talk) 1 April 2025 [1].

Robert Pattinson

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Nominator(s): 750h+ 13:34, 4 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about Robert Pattinson, an actor who is well known for his looks and, despite playing the main character in one of the highest-grossing film series' of all time, has never won a major award. If successful this will be my ninth successful nomination. I do think this article is similar in quality to articles like Brad Pitt and Josh Hutcherson, so i am pretty confident. Thanks for all comments. 750h+ 13:34, 4 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

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  • Comments to follow.
MSincccc (talk) 19:23, 4 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Nothing wrong with the licensing. I will return with further suggestions later. MSincccc (talk) 19:30, 4 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]
The Personal life section of the article presently lacks images. MSincccc (talk) 17:26, 5 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]
@MSincccc: the personal life section does not require images. 750h+ 23:31, 5 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Support on media. MSincccc (talk) 18:41, 8 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Wehwalt

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  • "He later returned" Maybe "he then returned"?
  • "The family lived in a semi-detached, five-bedroom Victorian house.[9]" Is this really worth the including?
  • "and later appeared his school's adaptation fo William Golding's Lord of the Flies.[10]" A missing "in" before "his" and "fo" should be "of".
  • "Bill Goodykoontz of the Arizona Republic" It is The Arizona Republic.
  • "While promoting Good Time, Pattinson wrote and starred in a short film for GQ titled Fear & Shame. Filmed on the streets of New York, the piece follows Pattinson as he navigates the city's bustling environment, attempting to buy a hot dog while evading the media and fans.[143][144]" He's playing himself, I assume? It might be useful to clarify that.
More soon--Wehwalt (talk) 17:42, 8 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]
  • ALS Ice Bucket Challenge might be linked.
  • "Later that year, while filming The Batman in Liverpool, surprised a ten-year-old autistic fan who had been waiting on set to meet him." I would imagine there's a "he" or "Pattinson" missing. Why was the kid on set if the meeting was not possible due to covid?
  • "and the Blaze,[201] as well as photographers Peter Lindbergh,[202] Nan Goldin,[200] and Mikael Jansson.[203]" vs. "Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire (2005), The Childhood of a Leader (2015), The Lost City of Z (2016), Good Time (2017), High Life (2018), The Lighthouse (2019), The Batman (2022), The Boy and the Heron (2023) and Mickey 17 (2025).[299]" I see inconsistency in the use of the Oxford comma.
That's it for now.--Wehwalt (talk) 18:58, 8 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]
@Wehwalt: all fixed. Thanks for the comments! 750h+ 00:51, 9 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Support--Wehwalt (talk) 02:05, 9 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Medxvo

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  • "Denis'" / "Eggers'" / "Reeves'" - Shouldn't these end with "'s" per MOS:'S? I'd check for other similar incidents throughout the article
  • "adaptation to" - "adaptation of"?
  • "When Pattinson was twelve he was" - "When Pattinson was twelve, he was"
  • "pubs across London where he sang" - "pubs across London, where he sang"
  • "had a more prominent role on the television film" - "... in the television film"?
  • "the highest-grossing film of 2005" - "the highest-grossing film of 2005" per MOS:MORELINK
  • "starred alongside Kristen Stewart as Edward Cullen on the romantic fantasy" - "... in the romantic fantasy"?
  • "co-star Stewart" - Is "co-star" needed?
  • There are some uses of "noted" / "noting" , which is generally not recommended at MOS:CLAIM. Perhaps "stated", "said", "believed", or "thought" are better options?
  • "described Pattinson as "shy and watchful" and noted that he "radiates ..." - "described the character as "shy and watchful" and believed that Pattinson "radiates ..." -- I think "shy and watchful" was a description of the character itself not Pattinson
  • "for satirical drama" - "for the satirical drama"?
  • "Pattinson flew to Morocco, for Werner Herzog's biographical film" - "Pattinson flew to Morocco for Werner Herzog's biographical film", and I'm not sure there's a need to wikilink Morocco
  • "He next star in Anton Corbijn's biographical drama, Life (2015)," - "He next starred in Anton Corbijn's biographical drama Life (2015),"
  • "the Safdie Brothers' neo-exploitation" - "the Safdie brothers' neo-exploitation"
    whoops didn't see this, done @Medvxo: 750h+ 09:51, 18 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]
    oops, @Medxvo: 750h+ 09:52, 18 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]
  • IndieWire can be italicized and wikilinked
  • Variety and The Hollywood Reporter are linked several times throughout the article, while other publications are linked once at the first incidence
  • "He earned his second nomination from Independent Spirit Award for Best Male Lead" - "He earned his second nomination for the Independent Spirit Award for Best Male Lead", and this statement doesn't appear to be sourced if I'm not mistaken
  • "A critical and commercial success, Pattinson's casting initially ..." - I believe the film itself received critical and commercial success not Pattinson's casting?
  • "The film received mostly positive reviews with most of the focus" - "The film received mostly positive reviews, with most of the focus"
  • "filming The Batman in Liverpool, surprised ..." - I'm not sure if Liverpool needs to be linked, and "he" is probably missing before "surprised"
  • Why isn't "Sexiest Men Alive" placed in quotation marks in its three uses in the article?
  • "However, the couple ultimately broke up" - I'm not sure there's a need for "however" here
  • Do you think Siegfried, Brunhild, Giselher, King Gunther, Kriemhild, Hogwarts, Bella, and cello would be helpful wikilinks?

I think that's all from me. You've done great work on the article! Medxvo (talk) 22:05, 17 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Medxvo: all done, much thanks! 750h+ 04:26, 18 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Source review - pass

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  • All sources are of good quality.
  • Tweaks for consistency:
    • fn 279: Link The Hollywood Reporter
    • fn 304: Link The Los Angeles Times
  • Link rot:
    • fn 209 is rotten and no archive link
  • Spot checks:
    • fn 25, 112, 212, 286, 289, 296 - okay
      Comment: The dense footnoting made spot checking much less painful than usual.
  • n.b.: You misspelled Pattinson's name in the third paragraph of the lead

Hawkeye7 (discuss) 19:32, 23 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Hawkeye7: much thanks for pointing out these issues, all addressed. 750h+ 00:12, 24 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Source reviews are always nit picky. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 00:28, 24 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

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  • "supporting organizations such as" - as Pattinson is British then I would argue that the article should be written in British English per WP:TIES, which means the word should be spelt "organisations"
  • In the second paragraph of "early life" there's a lot of "Pattinson did this....Pattinson did this...." - some of these could be changed to "he" to ease the repetition a bit
  • "where he portrayed the son " => "in which he portrayed the son "
  • "had a more prominent role on the television film" => "had a more prominent role in the television film"
  • "in preparation for his role as Cedric Diggory" => "in preparation for the role"
  • "who is shot, left paralyzed" => "who is shot, left paralysed"
  • "Robert portrayed Daniel Gale" => "he portrayed Daniel Gale"
  • "In the film, Art, who, after being dumped by his girlfriend, moves back in with his parents and convinces a Canadian self-help guru to relocate to London to help him rebuild his life" - this doesn't work grammatically. I think removing "who" would fix it
  • "Set in the Outback a decade after an economic collapse, Pattinson's character" - Pattinson's character is not set in the Outback, the film is, so this needs a bit of reworking
  • "Premiering in competition at the 2017 Cannes Film Festival,[136] Pattinson's performance" - similar to the above, it wasn't his performance that premiered, it was the film
  • "Filmed on the streets of New York and playing himself, the piece follows Pattinson as he navigates" => "Filmed on the streets of New York, the piece follows Pattinson, playing himself, as he navigates"
  • "but after recognizing Pattinson's dedication" => "but after recognising Pattinson's dedication"
  • "the international aid organization Help Refugees" => "the international aid organisation Help Refugees"
  • "He was also recognized by the London Evening Standard" => "He was also recognised by the London Evening Standard"
  • That's all I got. Just very minor things. Will be happy to support when they are fixed -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 18:44, 27 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]
    @ChrisTheDude: much thanks for the comments! will review your next FAC. 750h+ 03:52, 28 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support - look for another FAC from me in a week or two :-) -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 08:23, 28 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]
    Great thanks! 750h+ 09:12, 28 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]

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