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Prinz Adalbert-class cruiser (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Here's the next article in the series (now I just need to start pushing them through FAC too)! Thanks to all who take the time to review the article. Parsecboy (talk) 10:25, 4 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Nick-D

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The astonishingly-large number of portholes in the ships certainly help to explain their unhappy wartime history! I'd like to offer the following comments:

  • "was a group of two" - "was a pair of" perhaps?
    • Works for me
  • There's a bit of repetition in the lead
    • I'm guessing you're referring to the "their"s in the first paragraph? That's been reworded
  • "The operation proceeded as planned, however," - perhaps tweak this to "The remainder of the operation proceeded as planned, however," or similar?
    • Good idea
  • Did E9's attack cause any casualties?
    • Yes, added
  • Do we know how many torpedoes hit Prinz Adalbert in the fatal attack? The current text implies that all of the torpedoes that were fired hit the ship.
    • I'll have to do some digging on this point
  • Have any experts commented on this design? The loss of both ships suggests they were not fit for purpose as large combat vessels. Was this the result of them being optimised for colonial service but ending up being used against the British? Nick-D (talk) 11:21, 8 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Pickersgill-Cunliffe

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  • Is there a reason for having Prinz Adalbert's speed in the infobox rather than Friedrich Karl's?
    • I typically use the lead ship's stats for the box (though occasionally there are exceptions, like Deutschland-class battleship, where the lead ship differed from the other 4, which were all identical)
  • Are you using "German Navy" or "Kaiserliche Marine"? Right now you use both (and both "German Navy" and "German navy")
    • Should be standardized now
  • "operations with the fleet as well" Clarify which fleet?
    • Good idea
  • I've been asked to do this at FAC before so would like your opinion on adding a sentence to provide a generic description of what an armoured cruiser actually is
    • I think an explanatory note makes sense (and I should probably copy over to other articles in this series)
  • Link Scharnhorst and Gneisenau
    • Good catch
  • You say "a number of defects" but only describe one
    • There are 2 there - poor armor protection and casemate guns too low
  • Link beam and draft
    • Good catch, not sure how I forgot those
  • Move flagship link to first mention
    • Done
  • "These guns were provided..." This sentence and the next both begin "These guns" and the next "The guns" which makes for awkward reading
    • Reworded
  • I expect this is an obvious point, but is it possible to note whether the torpedo tubes were fixed?
    • I'd assume yes, but Groner doesn't specifically say (nor does Dodson or Lyon)
  • In my opinion the images would be better used if the Friedrich Carl early career photo was moved to where the line drawing is, and that is in turn moved to the armor section, although that might require the splitting of that section
    • Swapped
  • Is it possible to say where exactly the two conning towers were? You mention them in relation to the positioning of guns and their own armor, but it isn't too easy to understand where we're talking about
    • Added a line
  • I realise this is mentioned in the individual articles, but your opinion on adding the ship namesakes here as well?
    • We can do that
  • The Friedrich Carl article says she was laid down in August 1901, not August 1900
    • Good catch
  • Link commissioning
    • Done
  • "Cruiser Division of the Baltic Sea" is this a title by itself or should this be the Baltic Sea Fleet or similar?
    • That's the unit title - translated of course
  • "managed to keep the cruiser afloat long enough" While I realise this is mentioned in the proceeding paragraph it would be useful to specifically mention that she sinks here
    • Done
  • "1 July 1915" Repeated year not needed
    • Removed
  • Where was Prinz Adalbert sailing and/or sailing to when she was torpedoed?
    • Clarified
  • "September 1915" Repeated year
    • Removed
  • Link destroyers
    • Done
  • Out of interest, is there any coverage on the two wrecks? I wondered whether there's been any salvage or similar
    • Nothing I've been able to find - they're not mentioned in Dodson & Cant's book on postwar fates of the Central and Axis powers of the world wars. I did track down this, which has a photo of the wreck, but not much else to note
  • "a pair of two armored cruisers" > "a pair of armored cruisers"
    • Just a wee bit redundant, eh?
  • Lede says they were built under the Second Naval Law, while main text only mentions the First Naval Law
    • First is correct - the Second went into effect after Prinz Adalbert was laid down
  • Is it the "cruiser squadron" or "Cruiser Division"? Differs between lede and main text
    • Division is correct
  • "Six-hundred and seventy-two men were killed" Suggest not spelling out the number here, as you do in main text
    • Done

@Parsecboy: Hi, that's all I have for now. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 15:35, 29 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

HF

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I will review this soon. Hog Farm Talk 14:58, 14 May 2025 (UTC)[reply]

  • "Prinz Heinrich, was an alteration of an earlier vessel, Fürst Bismarck," - would it be worthwhile to clarify that this was a design alteration, rather than physically altering the prior vessel?
    • I suppose that could be ambiguous - sure
  • For infobox draft figures, it is standard practice to use the forward draft if the aft draft is deeper? At least in my mind, it would make sense to use the deeper draft, as that would be the actual restricting figure for the ship's operations
    • A fair point
  • "The ships' casemate guns were placed too low, which rendered them exceedingly wet even in a slight swell. " - is it necessary to have this in the article twice?
    • Good catch - I didn't notice that was there when I added the criticisms per Nick's comments above.

I expect to support; this looks to be in quite good shape to me. Hog Farm Talk 03:29, 17 May 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks HF! Parsecboy (talk) 18:15, 17 May 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Looks good; supporting. Hog Farm Talk 22:00, 17 May 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

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  • "File:German cruiser Prinz Heinrich - Page's Magazine 1902.png" creates a sandwich with the infobox.
  • No alt text?
  • The image sizing should use upright, not px.
  • "File:SMS Prinz Adalbert linedrawing.png": is the full name and/or the date of death of the author known?

Gog the Mild (talk) 19:22, 18 May 2025 (UTC)[reply]