Wikipedia:Peer review/Ochaco Uraraka/archive2

Ochaco Uraraka

Previous peer review

I have listed this article for peer review because the article is currently a WP:GA, and I was wondering what I should do to have it be an WP:FAC. User:Tintor2 did the first peer review at Wikipedia:Peer review/Ochaco Uraraka/archive1 and reviewing the WP:GAN at Talk:Ochaco Uraraka/GA1. I know the criteria for WP:FAC are that the article must be thorough, fully follow the WP:MOS, and have high-quality sources. I wonder how else I need to polish this article before I can have an FAC.

Thank you, Z. Patterson (talk) 01:46, 12 June 2025 (UTC)

Comments from Jaguar

I'll list some comments below upon my first read-through:

• "Born into a poor working-class household" - linking poverty is perhaps a WP:OVERLINK, I would remove it
• "She is one of Izuku Midoriya's closest friends" - it would be beneficial to explain who Midoriya is, for manga Luddites like me
• "quirk is Zero Gravity (無重力, Zero Gurabiti)," - I have never seen the small font Japanese text before, what is it?
• "Her character has received praise for her development and personality" - 'development' here links to character arc, I would simply replace it with what it links to
• "Originally, he was going to create the character who would become" - would sound better as Originally, he intended to create the character who would become
• "he remarked that his tendency to draw thick hips," - hips overlink
• "Ayane Sakura said she was happy to have received the role of Ochaco and that her desire to portray Ochaco was strong" - rephrase to Sakura was happy to have received the role of Ochaco and said her desire to portray Ochaco was strong
• "Sakura stated that in the first season of the series, she thought Ochaco was a character with a strong core" - would cut down to Sakura thought Ochaco was a character with a strong core in the first season
• " Additionally, she said that from the first season, she regarded Ochaco as a hero instead of a heroine." - would cut to She also regarded Ochaco as a hero instead of a heroine, particularly in the first season
• "remember much because she could not see the script well" - script is another overlink
• "Luci Christian stated that she had not read the manga, she was surprised to learn that Ochaco was strong" - an over-reliance on 'stated' comes across as clunky and can be better substituted for words like 'said', 'affirmed', or another synonyms
• "such as in the speech she gave to plead for Izuku's return in the sixth season, where she cannot be hampered by her voice." - what does this mean?
• "and it would resonate for so many people trying to figure things out when they are young." - informal text
• "She enters the aeroplane by being shot through a harpoon" - sounds like she was shot through by a harpoon! Not She enters the aeroplane by being propelled by a harpoon?
• "Ochaco understands Izuku Midoriya well,[20] was Izuku's first friend,[2] is positive to Izuku, and trusts him." - very choppy! This can easily be condensed into one sentence

These are all of my recommendations so far. Overall, it's a well-written article, certainly deserving of its GA status though it will need a brush up before submitting to FAC. Though seemingly minor, I would be wary of overlinks and repeated usages of loaded terms like 'stated', as it often disrupts the flow of the prose and comes across as rather choppy. You've done a good job with this article. ♦ JAGUAR  09:28, 12 June 2025 (UTC)

@Jaguar: The small text above 無重力 is ゼログラビティ (Zero Gurabiti), furigana. This appears in the original My Hero Academia and in supplementary works. The katakana reading appears in the Japanese Wikipedia article because if the furigana had been absent, it would have been read as むじゅうりょく (Mujūryoku), the standard readings based on what appears in the list of jōyō kanji. I created a list of things to address in Talk:Ochaco Uraraka/to do. Thank you most sincerely. Z. Patterson (talk) 22:02, 12 June 2025 (UTC)

@Jaguar: I am wondering if I should provide an alternative spelling to Ochaco's name, Ochako, as that spelling is used in the Viz Media English translation of the My Hero Academia manga, similar to how alternative spellings are used in articles such as honour, rigour, metre, and jewellery. Z. Patterson (talk) 22:15, 12 June 2025 (UTC)

I addressed the points that you addressed. Z. Patterson (talk) 02:54, 13 June 2025 (UTC)

I was WP:BOLD and decided to add the note about alternative spelling for thoroughness. Thoroughness is a criterion of WP:FAC. Z. Patterson (talk) 21:27, 14 June 2025 (UTC)