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Male bonding

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I've listed this article for peer review because I have recently updated it for a class project and would like some assistance in determining how to improve it further.

Thanks, Vrosen3 (talk) 07:22, 7 December 2024 (UTC)vrosen3[reply]

Comments from Z1720

@Vrosen3: Comments after a quick skim:

First paragraph in "Young adulthood (Ages 22-30) and middle adulthood (Ages 30-60)" needs a citation.
Citations are not usually necessary in the lead, as the information will be cited in the article body.
I suggest looking for additional sources to expand the article. Some places to look are Google Scholar, archive.org, doaj.org, WP:LIBRARY or databases in your local library system. Consider information from different time periods, cultures, relationships, and locations around the world.
After completing your research, I suggest expanding the lead to become a summary of the information. Right now, it seems a little short.

I hope this helps. Z1720 (talk) 23:13, 19 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]