Wikipedia:Peer review/Louis Abramson/archive2
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This is my second PR listing for this article. The first one didn't draw any comments, but I did get a bunch of useful feedback later on the talk page from MSincccc, Gog the Mild, and Rollinginhisgrave for which I am grateful. Having incorporated their suggestions, I'm coming back here to see what else folks can spot before I send it off to FAC.
There's a tie-in to my first FA, Fleetwood Park Racetrack; the oddly crooked West 167th Street, which makes up the southern side of the Home of the Daughters of Jacob property is shaped that way because that's the path the old racetrack took. I got into all this because one day as I was riding my bicycle through the area, I wondered about the unusual street and the even more unusual building. As I dug into the history, I discovered both the race track and Abramson.
Thank you in advance for you comments, RoySmith (talk) 18:08, 29 June 2025 (UTC)
- Sorry for the delay. I’m presently busy academically but will try to give the article another read before further suggestions. Regards. MSincccc (talk) 17:29, 1 July 2025 (UTC)
- I'm more than happy to get more comments from you, but I was really hoping to get some fresh perspectives from new reviewers. RoySmith (talk) 23:37, 1 July 2025 (UTC)
Hello Roy!
"After leaving Duncan's employ, Abramson moved to Seattle but did not stay there for many years."
, maybe rephrase the sentence as "did not stay there for long"?- References are missing in the first paragraph.
- If possible, find more information regarding his education: when did he attended Cooper Union and the Mechanics Institute, and why didn't he graduated? Life hardships? Lack of funds?
- When he began working for Duncan and when did he left the job? And why did he left Duncan?
- Is architectual lettering same as Technical lettering? If so, there should be a wikilink.
- Good question. I'm not convinced it's the same thing; from what I can tell from a bit of reading, architectural lettering is more of an art form. I might change my mind later, but for now I'm going to leave it unlinked.
Larger examples might include a gymnasium and a swimming pool.
What kind of gymnasium are we talking about here? I'm from the region heavily influenced by the Austrians, and to me a gymnasium is a sort of a high school.- Was Abramson invovlved in creating the "shul with a pool" style? Was he a contributor or a pionir of the style or he "just" used the style himself?
All in all, I'd say there's a lack in his biography, with several essential data missing. Depending on sources, I believe this can be fixed. The structure of the article itself is otherwise good. Considering the person the article is about, MOS:CHRONOLOGICAL obviously wouldn't work for the second part of the article (Abamson's achievements). I would love to read more about his influence on the New York's architecture though. --Governor Sheng (talk) 18:26, 9 July 2025 (UTC)
- Thank you for your comments. I'll work on these items as I find time (I'm not in any rush). Unfortunately, I haven't been able to find anything else so far about his personal life, but I'll keep looking. RoySmith (talk) 20:37, 9 July 2025 (UTC)