Wikipedia:Peer review/Dan Burros/archive1

Dan Burros

I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to try to get it to FA status, something I have never done before. It passed a GA review from PMC and I would like to see what others think about it, and get it to the best quality I can get it.

Jewish neo-Nazi. What an inherent contradiction, right? There is basically no explanation for why he ended up this way, even in the most extensive sources which basically just accept that they have no way of knowing (the only people who may have known, his parents, never agreed to be interviewed). I find the article to be, if anything, an interesting glimpse into the history of the 1960s racist right. It incorporates basically all relevant and due information on Burros I could find in secondary sources.

My main concerns are prose/grammar awkwardness, and a fear that I have misrepresented his military history as I do not know how that really works and I kept correcting how I had written it as I learned more. If anything lacks context that would be good to have pointed out, as I've read about this topic enough it may be hard for me to notice. It should be mostly fixed now, but extra eyes would be nice.

Thanks, PARAKANYAA (talk) 05:08, 7 June 2025 (UTC)

Sophisticatedevening

Overall I think this is in very good shape, aside from the few prose notes I think this might be ready now. Sophisticatedevening🍷^(talk) 16:14, 17 June 2025 (UTC)

Prose

• In this eulogy, Rockwell wrote thus: "thus" feels unnecessarily verbose here.
  • yeah this sentence was giving me grief. dropped the thus
• Burros was enrolled in Hebrew school … where he had his bar mitzvah. He became antisemitic as a teenager. Use a consistent past tense, switching from past perfect to simple past is unnecessary.
  • fixed
• Wording like Ideologically influenced by fascist ideologue is repetitive and kinda redundant.
  • dropped the "Ideologically"
• After serving in the Army for several years, he was discharged under honorable conditions and joined the American Nazi Party in 1960. A little confusing, did he join in the same year he was discharged?
  • specified date in lead
• The first occurence of American Nazi Party is in the lead, and it is referred to as ANP for the rest of the article. Try to expand into full name at least once every now and then.
  • It's already used fully in a few instances. I added it back to full in a few places where it'd been a while since it had been mentioned in full though

Refs

• A few of the online journal cites are missing access dates, also you may want to add a url to them as well.
  • None have urls so I cannot add access dates.
• A lot of citations use |language=en, it isn't necessary since it doesn't show up at all (although I'm not too sure what FAC thinks about it).
  • As far as I'm aware it's not forbidden, and I think it's useful for metadata/differentiation ressons.

Imgs

• All files' copyright checks out, alt-text is provided, appropriately placed, no MOS:SANDWICH problems, all good AFAICT.