Talk:Dominique Moceanu/GA1
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Nominator: Riley1012 (talk · contribs) 19:36, 23 May 2025 (UTC)
Reviewer: Bgsu98 (talk · contribs) 09:26, 7 June 2025 (UTC)
After the success with Gabby Douglas, I will be happy to review this article as well. Of course, you can always get a head start by addressing the same issues with the infobox and competition table that we did with Gabby’s article. Bgsu98 (Talk) 09:26, 7 June 2025 (UTC)
- User:Riley1012: I haven't forgotten about this; it just hasn't been a good couple of days lately. I will hopefully be able to start it tomorrow. Thank you for your patience! Bgsu98 (Talk) 01:59, 12 June 2025 (UTC)
Review (June 13, 2025)
[edit]Per the changes we incorporated at the Gabby Douglas article, I would list out the clubs and the coaches, separated with <br>, by whatever standard you chose the last time for ordering (chronological, alphabetical... I can't remember). Same with the choreographer since there are two listed.
- Lead
- Excellent; no problems at all!
- Photo in the infobox is good!
- Early life
- "Both of her parents are..." It sounds like this should be "were" if one of them is dead.
- If you want to wikilink Romania, it should be earlier when it first appears.
- Gymnastics career/Early career
- I would wikilink floor exercise (as well as any other gymnastics disciplines that might be mentioned in the future).
- This sentence – "She finished fourth in the floor exercise final at the 1993 U.S. Olympic Festival after the crowd booed her score, leading the judges to increase it from 9.600 to 9.650." – is a little unclear. Was the fourth-place finish a step up after the score was changed? If the placement changed, maybe reverse the sentence: "After the crowd booed her score..." ?
- This is actually unclear based on the source - Riley1012 (talk) 00:10, 16 June 2025 (UTC)
- I would say "on the balance beam", but that may not be correct. Maybe "balance beam event"? The balance beam is something you equate with being on. You know what... I'll let you decide which is better and trust your judgment.
- I would wikilink the 1996 Summer Olympics.
- I would replace No. 7 with "number seven".
- 1996 Summer Olympics
- I would wikilink 1996 Summer Olympics, and also clarify where they were held.
- Wikilink tibia.
- "on the balance beam..."
- "Her teammate Kerri Strug vaulted after her to clinch the gold for the U.S. but injured her ankle in the process." Write out United States, followed by a comma.
- "...and crashed into the balance beam on her head." This reads awkwardly. Maybe something simpler like "hit her head on the balance beam"?
- I would remove "just missing a medal". Everyone knows what fourth place means.
- Post-Olympics
- Are there wikilinks for the annual U.S. gymnastics championships?
- Not until 2010. -Riley1012 (talk) 00:10, 16 June 2025 (UTC)
- I would say she withdrew "due to" or "on account of" a knee injury.
- "she continued to train on floor and vault" I would say "the floor" and "the vault".
- Wikilink USA Gymnastics.
- What are "tucked full-in tumbling pass" and "double pike"?
- I've chosen to simplify these sentences because there isn't an easy explanation/wikilink
- It's better now and more readable. Bgsu98 (Talk) 00:34, 16 June 2025 (UTC)
User:Riley1012: I will come back to this, but this is at least someplace to start. Bgsu98 (Talk) 00:10, 13 June 2025 (UTC)
- No worries, I have also been quite busy. I believe I have addressed everything you've brought up so far. -Riley1012 (talk) 00:10, 16 June 2025 (UTC)