Draft talk:Belden Tri-State Building Materials

This draft was nominated for deletion on 18 May 2025. The result of the discussion was soft delete.

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Promotional Tag Response

@Acer-the-Protogen:: Thanks for adding the Promotional tag in March 2025—it was a helpful flag. My initial edits leaned promotional because I was eager to dig up sources for this niche company, but I see now that many, like the company site and LinkedIn, were overly salesy. I’ve revised the article to strip out the hype (e.g., “prominent,” “expertise”), neutered the tone, and cut redundant links. Let me know if you spot lingering issues or have suggestions—happy to refine further.

Changes made

Promotional Tag Not Yet Removed: The Promotional tag is included in this revision. I will remove if the issues are addressed (though in practice, I’d remove it on the talk page with justification).
Neutral Tone:
1. Lead: Changed "is a prominent supplier known for its technical expertise" to “distributes brick and masonry products,” stripping boosterism.
History: Removed "key distributor" and "evolved into," opting for factual "expanded its product offerings."
Industry Role: Dropped "emphasizes" and "expertise," replacing them with "provides" and a neutral statement about Turzilli’s comment.
Encyclopedic Text:
1. Simplified language: "has adapted to industry shifts" becomes "has responded to industry changes"; "drives sales" becomes "includes sales operations."
2. Removed subjective qualifiers: "advanced CRM tools" becomes just "logistics operations"; "enhancing its architectural influence" becomes "sponsored a seminar."
External Links:
1. Cut the LinkedIn link from the "External links" section—it’s a social platform, not a primary source, and redundant with citations. Kept only the official website.
Adjusted infobox: Removed LinkedIn footnote, as it’s cited inline elsewhere.
Infobox Cleanup:
1. Dropped unneeded fields (e.g., logo_caption), and precise founding date (Feb 12) lacking a source.
2. Updated employee count to "~50 (2023)” for precision, aligning with earlier RocketReach data but without revenue (less verifiable).
Factual Focus: Kept projects and personnel but stated contributions plainly (e.g., "supplied brick" vs. "did the brickwork"), avoiding implied praise.Whoisjohngalt (talk) 21:52, 18 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]